Looks alright to me. Usually I'd say Chidori is Veteran+, but for a obvious specialist in Raiton and at once a day - I'm okay with that. All in all, good job!
Approved!
Empty-handed I entered the world Barefoot I leave it. My coming, my going - Two simple happenings That got entangled. - Kozan Ichikyo
Hey! There's a few things to fix before we can progress.
First off, while Shurikenjutsu can always be swapped out for another weapon-based proficiency (Kenjutsu, Kyujutsu, etc.), Taijutsu or Stealth can generally only be replaced by a Clan's Hijutsu and even then only for something similar. Specifically, most characters only have a chance at two enhancements using their free slots. The current set-up gives you the equivalent of 4 free slots - so that'll sadly have to be changed. Since you seem to be going for Genin Option A, you'll need Taijutsu (Which also affects a character's general agility.) or a close substitute in the form of a physical fighting formor Clan Hijutsu, Shurikenjutsu (In your case, Kyujutsu), and Stealth (Is not only your ability to remain undetected, but also your ability to detect others.), plus your two free slots. It is in these slots that you can have a ranked proficiency (Futon), a Dormant Advanced Release (Jiton), or Enhancements (Enhanced Dexterity and Mental Fortitude.)
While I do understand the rationale in your character's backstory behind replacing Taijutsu and Stealth with other proficiencies , I do not think that alone, as it is anyway, is enough to justify it.
Changing those should allow the character to be approved, though you could also try asking Sharp and Snake in the #ask-a-staff channel on Discord for their own opinions.
Hello! There are a few things that will need changing before your character can be accepted. Unfortunately, we only allow eastern-style names for the characters on our site. Whether it be Japanese, Chinese, Korean, or similar is fine - but there isn't anywhere remotely nearby where people have drastically different names.
Enhancement proficiencies are always unranked, so simply remove [Apprentice/Unranked] and that'll be good to go.
Finally, we'd like everyone with ninjutsu going forward to be a little more specific on what their abilities are. There's no need to list off jutsu, but please give us a bit more of an idea of what his limitations with Doton Release are. You can use this to get an idea of the general level one with such a proficiency would have.
Once you've made the necessary edits, just go ahead and reply back to this thread and we can continue!
